Saturday, March 8, 2014

Weekend Writing Warriors #2 - Derek

Another excerpt from BLUEBONNETS FOR ELLY. In this scene Elly is manning Granny's table at the Sunset Acres Retirement Village rummage sale. She's in for a nice surprise. 



     “Hi.” A deep voice shook Elly out of her musings. “You must be Mrs. Macauley’s granddaughter.”
Elly looked up from her chair—and up some more—to see a tall, brown-haired man approaching the table. His shoulders filled out a faded chambray shirt in a way that promised firm muscles underneath. He had his hand extended, and his even white teeth flashed a friendly smile.
The memory of his sweet-as-molasses voice and buff body made Elly stare.
Derek.
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30 comments:

Millie Burns said...

How is it she knows him but he doesn't know her, I wonder?

jacquie said...

I remember this scene. LOVED this book!

Sandra Nachlinger said...

Elly has seen Derek and overheard him talking with someone, but this is the first time she has actually met him.

Sandra Nachlinger said...

Thank you, Jacquie.

Veronica Scott said...

Well, well, Derek is a very interesting character all right! Enjoyed the excerpt, can;t wait to see what happens next.

Frank Fisher said...

Good description of Derek. But from her reaction, I guess she's not happy to see him?

karysafaire.com said...

Oh, nice. ;-) Love the second to last line. I at first wondered how he didn't know her but she knew him. Then I thought of several scenarios, the top one being that she'd had a crush on him in high school. Yep. I've known a few of those myself.

Charmaine Gordon said...

Delightful eight and the name Derek alone was perfect.

Sandra Nachlinger said...

That's the problem with having only eight sentences to work with! They've seen each other (revealed early in the book), and this is the scene where they finally meet.

diannehartsock said...

Ah ha! Someone from her past. This could get very interesting...and yummy!

Cara Bristol said...

I love the way you describe him. I like him already.

Teresa Cypher said...

Hmmm... "Derek". Could be good. Could be bad... Marvelous description, Sandra! :-)

Cynthia Hudson Keane said...

Yummm...I got chills reading this... ;) Delicious snippet!

Botanist said...

Great descriptions! And I get what other comments are about - this brief snippet is ambiguous, but from the intro I guess this is a welcome meeting.

Sandra Nachlinger said...

I should have written a better introduction to the scene in my post. Next time I'll do better.

Sandra Nachlinger said...

Thank you! It seemed to fit him.

Sandra Nachlinger said...

Actually, she is happy to see him! In trying to abide by the WeWriWar rules, I limited my intro to the excerpt. But I could have made my set-up clearer.

Sandra Nachlinger said...

He's a likeable character. Thank you for stopping by.

susan said...

sounds like she knows more about him than he thinks...

Sandra Nachlinger said...

You're right!

Carrie-Anne said...

This leaves me wondering what her previous knowledge of him comes from, though it seems like she's glad to see him regardless.

Creations by Laurel-Rain Snow said...

I can't wait to read this one! I have it on my Sparky.

Sue Ann Bowling said...

She doesn't seem apprehensive at seeing min.

Sandra Nachlinger said...

Sparky? I like that!

Beth Matthews said...

Ooh. Do they have a past? I am intrigued.

Also, cute cover! :)

Sandra Nachlinger said...

Thank you. The cover was created by artist Dawne Dominique at Sweet Cravings Publishing, my publisher for this book.

Karen Michelle Nutt said...

I might have a little 'mouth dropping' stare going on to. He sounds wonderful. :)

Gem Sivad said...

White teeth, great smile, wide shoulders, gorgeous voice...if they don't have a past together already, I'm guessing they will soon. Yumm...

Karen Bynum said...

Ooo, long-lost love has returned? Great snippet.

augustmacgregor said...

I like that she knows him, but he doesn't know her. A superb description of him, with that sweet molasses voice. A nice touch :)