Saturday, March 29, 2014

Weekend Writing Warriors #3 - Rick

Another excerpt from BLUEBONNETS FOR ELLY. Elly has just received a phone call from her ex-fiance, Rick, who dumped her for another woman. She refused to listen to what he had to say, but now memories intrude. 
He’d been her first love—only love, really—and it seemed as if she’d known him forever. What a dork he was in middle school, and then he’d turned into a handsome teenager. They’d dated exclusively since her seventeenth birthday. He’d been a part of all her high school experiences—homecoming celebrations, football games, Saturdays at the lake. Photos of them both filled her mom’s albums and the pages of her diary, both records of an idyllic time. The memory of the first time they’d made love intruded—nestled together on his crumpled bedspread, surrounded by walls of tennis trophies, while his parents were out for the evening. They’d both been virgins, nervous and unsure, but she’d been so certain of his love that she’d made the first move. Her soul mate…or so she’d thought.

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40 comments:

Kell said...

A lot of us have had guys like Rick in our pasts. I hate "my Rick" all over again when I read about him in a novel like Bluebonnets for Elly. It's a great book.

Sandra Nachlinger said...

Thank you, Kell! I'm glad you could relate, even though I'm sorry you had a "Rick" in your past.

Creations by Laurel-Rain Snow said...

Oh, yes, this excerpt resonates with me! Thanks for sharing...and I must try this Weekend Warriors.

jacquie said...

I think most women have had a Rick in their lives...or some version of him. It's just one more reason that I loved the book :)

Teresa Cypher said...

Nice job of introducing back-story, and building Elly's character, Sandra. :-) It's easy to empathize with her,now.

Sandra Nachlinger said...

It's a good group, Laurel-Rain. You'll get lots of good feedback.

Sandra Nachlinger said...

Thank you, Teresa. That was my intent.

Veronica Scott said...

Excellent excerpt, very relatable, and also leaves me wondering what he called her about. Well done!

Sandra Nachlinger said...

She's wondering why he called too! I'm glad you picked up on that.

Sandra Nachlinger said...

Too bad we've had to experience that, isn't it? But then it makes us really appreciate a good guy when he comes along.

Sue Ann Bowling said...

Sounds like she knew him considerably before they started going steady.

Frank Fisher said...

I loved the details about their relationship history. No matter how bad the break up is, you can't seem to let go of what you had together. But I think she should put him behind her and move on. I couldn't forgive someone who did what he did.

Evelyn Jules said...

Aww, it breaks my heart that he'd leave her after sharing so many memories and 'firsts' with her. Love your writing style! Wonderful flow to your words. Looking forward to reading more! :)

Sandra Nachlinger said...

I feel the same way. That's why she wouldn't even talk to him. She really didn't care what he had to say.

Sandra Nachlinger said...

Thank you, Evelyn.

Sandra Nachlinger said...

She did. But they were both awfully young.

Charmaine Gordon said...

Sandra, your writing is wonderful evoking memories for so many readers. Thanks.

Sandra Sookoo said...

Nice history there. They'll always be connected.

Karen Michelle Nutt said...

Heartbreaking that he didn't believe they were soul mates, too. Hopefully she'll move on. He certainly has and it would be difficult to go back now and forgive his betrayal. Well done snippet conveying her memories of what they had and the sad truth that the relationship is over.

Chelle Cordero said...

We never really do turn off the "love" even if we come to realize it was all a fantasy, sigh.
She is definitely someone we can relate to and that makes her all the more real to us.
And yes, why the heck is he calling her now?

Sandra Nachlinger said...

I'm glad you enjoyed today's post.

Sandra Nachlinger said...

Thank you. I was trying to convey where Elly was coming from.

Sandra Nachlinger said...

I'm glad you're curious!

tinachristopherauthor.com said...

Wonderful snippet, beautifully written. Her feelings are right there on the page, very relatable. Well done.

A.S. Fenichel said...

I want to yell, Don't get sucked in. Hang up the phone. LOL Great snippet.

gemma parkes said...

Aw, that's such a lovely snippet, so realistic too. She needs to be strong and think of the way he treated her, it's too easy to only remember the good! Can't wait to read whether or not she hangs up on him!

alexisduranblog.com said...

Very nice, resonates with the emotion of lost love. Hope he deserves to win her back!

Dani Jace said...

First loves always seem to remain tethered to our heart strings. And it seems so with Elly. If he's going to be the hero, how will she forgive him without appearing weak? Or will the real hero step in and save her... Great snippet!

Millie Burns said...

It's amazing how many folks are remembering their "Rick" and can feel so much empathy for the MC. Well written eight.

Sandra Nachlinger said...

I'm amazed too! We're lucky if our "Ricks" come into our lives early on -- maybe in high school -- so we can learn from them.

Sandra Nachlinger said...

I'm not telling what happens between Elly and Rick! I'm glad you enjoyed today's post.

Sandra Nachlinger said...

LOL. I'm glad I was able to elicit such a strong response from you.

Naomi Bellina said...

Nice description of better times. It helps to make him seem like a decent guy. But maybe he's not really!

Gem Sivad said...

Very evocative 8. Made me remember a "Rick" in my life.

Carrie-Anne said...

I think most people have that person we thought was a soulmate, only to be disappointed down the line when it didn't last or the other person didn't care as much.

Sarah W said...

I think having a "Rick" is a universal constant . . . Come to think of it, my "Rick" was named Rick. Whoa . . . ;)

caitlinsternwrites said...

What a perfect account of that crazy, hormone-filled, awkwardness of first love. You can never really forget it, but you do often have to move on.

Sandra Nachlinger said...

Wow. Perfect? That's about the nicest thing anyone has ever said to me.

Sandra Nachlinger said...

Maybe it's part of growing up.

Elyzabeth M. VaLey said...

*sigh* The melancholic sadness in this snippet is palpable. It's interesting how with time we tend to remember the good and set aside the bad. Hopefully, she won't forget the pain Rick caused her and she'll move on to someone better and worthy of her!