Saturday, March 8, 2014

Weekend Writing Warriors #2 - Derek

Another excerpt from BLUEBONNETS FOR ELLY. In this scene Elly is manning Granny's table at the Sunset Acres Retirement Village rummage sale. She's in for a nice surprise. 



     “Hi.” A deep voice shook Elly out of her musings. “You must be Mrs. Macauley’s granddaughter.”
Elly looked up from her chair—and up some more—to see a tall, brown-haired man approaching the table. His shoulders filled out a faded chambray shirt in a way that promised firm muscles underneath. He had his hand extended, and his even white teeth flashed a friendly smile.
The memory of his sweet-as-molasses voice and buff body made Elly stare.
Derek.
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30 comments:

  1. How is it she knows him but he doesn't know her, I wonder?

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    1. Elly has seen Derek and overheard him talking with someone, but this is the first time she has actually met him.

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  2. I remember this scene. LOVED this book!

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  3. Well, well, Derek is a very interesting character all right! Enjoyed the excerpt, can;t wait to see what happens next.

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  4. Good description of Derek. But from her reaction, I guess she's not happy to see him?

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    1. Actually, she is happy to see him! In trying to abide by the WeWriWar rules, I limited my intro to the excerpt. But I could have made my set-up clearer.

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  5. Oh, nice. ;-) Love the second to last line. I at first wondered how he didn't know her but she knew him. Then I thought of several scenarios, the top one being that she'd had a crush on him in high school. Yep. I've known a few of those myself.

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    1. That's the problem with having only eight sentences to work with! They've seen each other (revealed early in the book), and this is the scene where they finally meet.

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  6. Delightful eight and the name Derek alone was perfect.

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  7. Ah ha! Someone from her past. This could get very interesting...and yummy!

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  8. I love the way you describe him. I like him already.

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    1. He's a likeable character. Thank you for stopping by.

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  9. Hmmm... "Derek". Could be good. Could be bad... Marvelous description, Sandra! :-)

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  10. Yummm...I got chills reading this... ;) Delicious snippet!

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  11. Great descriptions! And I get what other comments are about - this brief snippet is ambiguous, but from the intro I guess this is a welcome meeting.

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    1. I should have written a better introduction to the scene in my post. Next time I'll do better.

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  12. sounds like she knows more about him than he thinks...

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  13. This leaves me wondering what her previous knowledge of him comes from, though it seems like she's glad to see him regardless.

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  14. I can't wait to read this one! I have it on my Sparky.

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  15. She doesn't seem apprehensive at seeing min.

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  16. Ooh. Do they have a past? I am intrigued.

    Also, cute cover! :)

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    1. Thank you. The cover was created by artist Dawne Dominique at Sweet Cravings Publishing, my publisher for this book.

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  17. I might have a little 'mouth dropping' stare going on to. He sounds wonderful. :)

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  18. White teeth, great smile, wide shoulders, gorgeous voice...if they don't have a past together already, I'm guessing they will soon. Yumm...

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  19. Ooo, long-lost love has returned? Great snippet.

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  20. I like that she knows him, but he doesn't know her. A superb description of him, with that sweet molasses voice. A nice touch :)

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